Wassabi Posted February 5, 2023 Share Posted February 5, 2023 https://docs.google.com/document/d/16CvLiO3Q2llIXaXA2_hWtY0ewVVUwIK8MIllLN8cBAs/edit?usp=sharing [CURRENT] CI SSGT, RnD SVA, CQOP, STS, Apollo Theta Unit, F5 Satan V [FORMER] Nu7 CPL||E11 SSGT => CEO||CI RnD SVA||SEC SM||D5 SSGT => CTF ESL Pyxis||MA||RRH Engineer Delta 16||RA => RFA Freyja PA1||Senior Mod||Chief Manager => HMR| [CUSTOM CLAN] Global Occult Coalition S-3 Horizon Initiative Legion III [CUSTOM JOBS] MTF Delta-1 [MISC] SILVER ENJOYER // Permanent Guns: Trench Knife, Karambit Black Laminate, Hatchet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ein Posted February 12, 2023 Share Posted February 12, 2023 This log has been assigned for grading! Please wait 1-3 days to receive a grade! RETIRED Security Colonel / Warden Legate / Juggernaut Enforcer / Research Administrator / M.A.D. Site Operations Chief / RRA Professor / MTF Delta-5 'Front Runners' Captain / Veteran Raptor Operative / Internal Affairs Agency Assistant Director / MTF Nu-7 'Hammer Down' Captain / Covert Agent / Deputy Head Field Training Officer / UN Global Occult Coalition Corporal / Combat Medic Tactical Paramedic / R&D Scientist / Marksman Recon Specialist / MTF Alpha-1 'Red Right Hand' Major / Enforcer Squadron Lead "We are the first line of defense. We are the first responders tasked to save those in danger. We have the responsibility to ensure the safety and well-being of all staff members. Because of that, you are the bravest men I have ever had the honor to serve with.” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ein Posted February 12, 2023 Share Posted February 12, 2023 Format: 20/25My only concerns with the format with this is that it's simply "bland", there's not much flavor and uniqueness to the format and it's overall just a bit bland to look at, however, it does convey the information. I would recommend utilizing Page Breaks to separate the whole "password" section from the beginning of the test log. I'd also personally recommend expanding the size of your table for the 'Testing Log' section so that it better correlates with the rest of them. I think the best thing to do here is look at the formats of other research logs (my dms are always available for some good logs / formats to look at) Grammar, spelling, and punctuation: 22/25Make some better use of your comma's and re-word some things, personally I don't see any direct or significant grammar mistakes, however the overall log just flowed weirdly. I would recommend using some sort of paraphrasing tool, referring to other logs, or hell, even refer to ChatGPT to rewrite the log so you can get a bit of a better understanding of how you should write logs. Idea, Quality and originality: 30/50 I combined the Ideas section with this one Everything flowed strangely, I don't understand how cryogenics related to a radioactive ball. Additionally, I don't see how this was a cognitohazard. Cognitohazard's are anomalies that cause undesirable / harmful effects to a person when seen / perceived, and this didn't seem to have this effect. My advice is to refer to the SCP wiki and look at some actual cognitohazardous SCP articles (if you can't find one, feel free to ask me in dms!) However, this document was completely original alongside the anomaly. Total score: 72/100 This document could definitely use some improvements. Do not take this as a negative review of your document or take this in a negative manner, this is only advice for you to improve. I'm excited to see more from you. RETIRED Security Colonel / Warden Legate / Juggernaut Enforcer / Research Administrator / M.A.D. Site Operations Chief / RRA Professor / MTF Delta-5 'Front Runners' Captain / Veteran Raptor Operative / Internal Affairs Agency Assistant Director / MTF Nu-7 'Hammer Down' Captain / Covert Agent / Deputy Head Field Training Officer / UN Global Occult Coalition Corporal / Combat Medic Tactical Paramedic / R&D Scientist / Marksman Recon Specialist / MTF Alpha-1 'Red Right Hand' Major / Enforcer Squadron Lead "We are the first line of defense. We are the first responders tasked to save those in danger. We have the responsibility to ensure the safety and well-being of all staff members. Because of that, you are the bravest men I have ever had the honor to serve with.” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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