opera Posted September 11, 2022 Share Posted September 11, 2022 https://docs.google.com/document/d/1M9q9HJ6vWYrDhvrEPUO2iJ_K0FU7Y83kRkrLyP3pOcQ/edit The Sniper of all Snipers Head Of Longshot, Major ~ Nu7 SM ~ G.O.C Deputy Head of Nail, CPL ~ SVA, V4 ██████ IV ~ E-11 SGT, La Feria Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EpicSealGamer (ESG) Posted November 1, 2022 Share Posted November 1, 2022 Grade: 52/100 Efficiency: 15/25 While I am all for large amounts of info, asking for the entire command tree below him is a bit much. I would recommend only going two/three below them. Insight: 10/25 You didn't ask for any details about the SF besides the name, and didn't ask for any of his fellow Majors, but other than that, not terrible. Presentation: 15/25 Your format, while custom, isn't incredibly unique, with only the intro being unique. While I give props for that, I'd like to see a little bit more. Your document is adequate. Writing: 7/25 One Described Torture, with just ID checks for the rest? Be more creative! Give it more flair! I know you can do better! Also run it through Grammarly or something, you've got a few grammar & spelling mistakes. Additional comment: Why would you shoot him at the end if he was a Major? That's good money! Overall: D- Test quality: Meets Expectations (Barely) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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