Ocean Posted February 28, 2020 Share Posted February 28, 2020 https://docs.google.com/document/d/10ggUIx5JUZg2KjZroeE4Mq1CdlC-PNH-57L3DnjQ9DA/edit?usp=sharing high light over the Blacked out parts to see more of the story Imperial RP | Ex Nova VCMDR Morpheus | Ex LTSL Val Kaiyo Police RP | PD CPL | Ex EMS EMT | Ex DOC CO | Bappo Family Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Krezzer Posted February 28, 2020 Share Posted February 28, 2020 Lore - Fits with the lore of SCP-1162. This reminds me of the storyline of SCP containment breach.Creativity - The idea of a D class pulling a high level keycard out of SCP-1162 isn't unheard of, although your method of storytelling is pretty unique. I do really like this method of story telling, leaving out details to leave up to the audience. Presentation - The font size of the text is a bit huge and the lack of visual/auditory stimuli is a shame. The blacked-out text is cool, but could have been executed better as the blacked-out text, even if competely redacted to the point of being unable to be read, doesn't leave all that much up to the imagination.Writing: Punctuation is all over the place. 4 comma's in one sentence makes for an awkward read when literally all of them could have easily been replaced by periods. The tone of the writing is also off-putting for me. "Wow they must have not terminated him and just put him as D class, i wonder why." looks more like something out of someone's diary than something a researcher wrote in the observation part of his research document. I'll leave actual scoring up to command but for a junior researching this was a really great test! I enjoyed reading it. I just wish the build-up was a bit longer because the premise is really interesting and I was enjoying the story. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slurmp Posted February 28, 2020 Share Posted February 28, 2020 TEST ASSIGNED FOR GRADING Foundation Doctor,FORMER E11 CPT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slurmp Posted February 29, 2020 Share Posted February 29, 2020 Grade: 85/100 (B) Test Quality: Quality Lore:20/20 I see nothing wrong with the lore here Creativity: 15/20 This can't really help the foundation but it is a pretty cool test log and I enjoyed reading it Presentation: 15/20 A bit bland but it still looks pretty cool as a test log overall Writing:35/40 Most of the writing in the test log was a copy pasted background research which if you take that away it's pretty short and I would have like it to be a little bit longer Foundation Doctor,FORMER E11 CPT Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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