SCP 330 Test

[Jackie Chan W-G]

Lore Rank/Name: Jr Researcher Jonzy

SCP #: 330

 

Test Idea: Test 1 - Have 2 D-Class take one candy each in the effort to be able to "Confuse" the candy bowel and see if they can in fact take more than 2. Test 2 - Have a D-Class with 2 candy and give him one to see if the effects of "taking" is till implied.  

Background Research: Unknown how this would of worked.

Hypothesis: N/A

 

Observations (what happened?): 3 D-Class, Myself and Pvt Jaeger enter the chamber, The D-Class i was with will be now known as D-Class 1, D-Class 2 and D-Class 3, D1 was told to grab ONE candy in which he did so and after D2 was told to grab ONE candy, this goes on till they both picked up a candy, D2 was the last test subject to pick a candy so i ask D1 to pick a candy in hoping that D2 cancels the effect of SCP 330 for D1, After D1 picked up a piece he lost his hands, doing so released his cuffs and with doing so he tried to run, Pvt Jaeger stopped him before he could escape, D1 was now terminated. Then i asked D2 to pick up a piece again to see if the effects would work with him again but no same fate as D1. D3 was told to pick up two candies after doing so i gave him a candy and nothing happened, D3 was brought to the medbay and given amnestics and taken back to D Block.   

Evidence/Visual Stimuli (Images): N/A

 

Analysis/Conclusion (was your hypothesis correct, why or why not, how can this discovery benefit the foundation?): None of my Hypothesis worked out and 2/3 D Class died sadly.

[Schölinger]

THIS IS AN UNOFFICIAL REVIEW, AND DOES NOT COUNT AS A GRADE. IT SHOULD BE CONSIDERED OOC.

This is your very first document since returning-- Firstly, I'm proud that you're hopping straight into documentation! You're already taking the first step on the road to improvement. Now, the first thing I would prove on is spelling and grammar. There are a few spelling mistakes throughout your document (such as "bowel" instead of "bowl",) so I would recommend proofreading before your next upload! As for grammar, you should really be writing in each section of the document with full sentences, instead of abbreviation. It really helps make the document flow.

I would recommend writing a little more into your background research and hypothesis. Having no hypothesis is a bad idea- It makes it look like you're going into your research blindly without a clue of what's going on. The same applies to your background research! Look into the SCP you're testing on using the SCP wiki, and write a little bit of pertinent information about it in your document. You should be writing each document as if the reader knows nothing about the SCP you're testing on, and it's your duty to educate them! 

Adding some color or bolding your headers can always help visually spice up your document. I'd also recommend adding a section for "personnel involved" to credit your escort properly! 

All-in-all, though, this is your very first step to progress- so don't take any of this advice too harshly. You're already doing a lot more than most JRs bother to do!

Edited June 9, 2022 by Schölinger
Removing annotations I made for myself