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SCP-527 Test Log [2/25/2020] (AR Brigand)


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Score: 93/100

Grade: A


Lore: 19/20
The results produced seem fairly accurate, and is believable to be able to replicate in canon. I mainly enjoyed SCP-527's particular skills in solving riddles, as it follows the theme of absurdity, in Dr.Wondertainment creations.

However, the belief of SCP-527's weakness during intelligence tests, being the result of a "decreased cerebral size", is incorrect as SCP-527's anomalous properties are purely cosmetic.

Creativity: 19/20
Although the concept of testing SCP-527's intelligence, certainly isn't ground breaking, you made sure to provide variety in your tests, which explored many angles of SCP-527's understanding, and brought upon a few interesting results.

Presentation: 20/20
The log was presented in a very clean and appealing manner. The text was easy to read, and you even included a table of your results! Further more, you also included an image of your experiment, and you went out of your way to present it as something official. I have no qualms with the presentation.

Writing: 35/40
This log is generally well written. You made an effort to use try and use correct terminology in your descriptions, and you took care into inserting proper punctuation. The events that had taken place were also simple to understand, and the results produced can easily be seen as canon. To summarise, your writing passes of as professional from a surface level, and can be believed to be something that could have been found from the wiki.

Though the writting does seem professional, it isn't without its mistakes.
There was an awfully awkward sentence in "SCP-527 has no other known qualities that makehim extraordinary and acts, speaks, and thinks like a regular humanmale". Where the paragraph begins to derail in a series of "ands", most likely because you attempted to build off text taken from the wiki.

Another case is in: "he and a D class were given the sameriddle. SCP-527 answered three out of three of the riddles correctly". Where the explanation implies a single riddle, when 3 were actually given. (This can also be seen in the Math section.)

There were also a few minor grammatical errors such as in "a arm", and incorrect terminology when referring to SCP-527. Refer to SCPs as "it", not "he" or "she".

In your conclusion, you stated that SCP-527 can be useful during military settings, because of his strong problem solving capabilities. This is actually contradicted by your own results, as it was shown that SCP-527 performed very poorly at chess, which is a game that's about strategy and resource management.

An alternative conclusion may instead be that his average level intelligence, may see it as a weaker threat to the Foundation, or perhaps its strong ability to solve riddles, being the possible result of prolonged interaction with its creator.

Despite the flaws in your writing, a clear effort was made, and the overall result was certainly impressive. With that being said, I shall conclude by marking this log, as Quality.

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